The Descent

*** Previous installment of Vivid Black – Amused

He scrubbed sleep from his eyes; surprised two plus hours had passed since take off. Flight crew purposefully supervised safety and cleaned before landing. He tried to stretch in an attempt to work the knots out of his six foot frame. Futile, when the legroom was better suited to a 12 year old.

Through the scratchy tin can PA, Captain Mark announced the final approach. Ray wondered if the harried mom would get everyone strapped in. Hearing popped in and out with the descent. Bump, rumble as wheels touch tarmac. Duffle retrieved, relief blew him into the San Antonio heat.


I was inspired to write this post by this weeks word at Velvet Verbosity. She has a ; 100 Word Challenge The chosen word is “Relief”.



7 comments on “The Descent

  1. Lance says:

    excellent sensory words and descriptive detail

    love the last line


  2. debseeman says:

    Thanks Lance. Now I’m off to begin my new 100 Word Song installment. Had the grands and the kid today, so writing kind gets put on the back burner.


  3. Carrie says:

    I love the image of him being blown into the heat. I can picture it, heat waves radiating off the tarmac.

    The first paragraph is a little choppy. Extra punctuation, maybe a missing word or wrong tense? Just needs a quick edit I think


  4. Tara R. says:

    I got that roller coaster feeling reading about the landing. Wonderful descriptions.


  5. shakira says:

    Poor guy but great ending. What a relief ! Great job!
    Mine is here
    Have you a ROCKING AND WEEK!!!


  6. deanabo says:

    Love your descriptions. I could picture every word.


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